Harbour Freight Safes
Harbour Freight Safes
can u tell me if this text is grammatically correct?
i’m italian and for english-homework i had to do a story about a ship…will u tell me if it is grammatically correct??? thank u very much 
The ship left the harbour at sunset. The captain, glaring the sun, was thinking if he would have been able to steer the ship until destination. Night had come, and the great ship, with its great freight of crystals and diamond felt safe and the crew didn’t even remotely suspect of being followed by pirates. It was nearly midnight when they was woken up by strange noises. in fact some brigand had managed to board the ship and they eagerly rush the holds laden with gold. The captain and his shipmates tried to stop them but all efforts were vain and someone even paid with his own life. The captain was the bravest: in order to defend his treasure and carry out his task, he struggled against the pirate commander, but he wasn’t sufficiently skilled and he was stabbed by sword’s pirate.
sent 1) ok
sent 2) I would use “staring” instead of glaring. “was wondering” instead of “was thinking” “be able to” instead of “would have been able to”. that one is hard, cause you are telling a story, but consider that your captain is *in* the present moment, even though you, the author are using ‘PAST. “until they reached their destination”.
sent 3) diamonds not diamond. “crew didn’t even suspect they were being followed”.
sent 4) nearly midnight when they were awoken by…
sent 5) I would take out the “in fact” totally. Pirates not brigand.
sent 6) all THEIR efforts ,
7) pirate’s sword.